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Andrea Thorfinson's avatar

Wow. This unfolded so quietly, the restraint, the silence, the ache between the lines. To me, it says loving through grief without naming it as such.

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

You are actually correct. It is a poem about love after grief.

Andrea Thorfinson's avatar

Something I know well.💗

Dawnithic's avatar

Dorie, this poem captures the quiet ache of hidden love and fading dreams with scaring precision. The Haiku structure mirrors the stillness and restraint of the emotions, making the darkness both literal and metaphorical...where longing, loss, and silence coexist.

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

Thank you Dawn. You explained it exactly as I imagined it

Dawnithic's avatar

Thanks, Dorie, for your compliment.

Gub's avatar

Wow what I really love is how it sounds - it’s structure, the choice of words really make it impactful despite it being only one verse. Amazing work