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Andrea Thorfinson's avatar

I really can’t top what Mark said, he captured it so perfectly. This one hits deep.

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

Thank you for reading! 🩷

Mark Crutchfield's avatar

Hi Doris,

Four words came to mind

Small poem, big ache.

It hits that moment where you feel someone leaving long before they say a word.

Thankyou!

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

Thank you so much for reading and for commenting. I really appreciate your feedback. I like what you said it is definitely a small poem, but a very big ache.

Gary L Taylor's avatar

Very succinct writing. Feels like the end of something and the associated sadness, that you've worded and made into something poetic.

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

Thank you so much. I appreciate you reading and commenting!

Edwin Canizalez's avatar

This was good...Ramones style with plenty of substance 🤌🏽

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

Thank you! I love the Ramones! My son when he was a baby.🩷 thank you for reminding me of this wonderful memory.

PancakeSushi's avatar

A very concise expression of hurt and the pain of a relationship that's unraveling

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

Thank you for reading. Yes, you understood it.