This reads like the grown-up version of someone quietly sliding a cheat code across the table. No shortcuts, just the real stuff—the kind that actually holds up when life starts shaking the floorboards. ‘Win or learn’… I like how that feels in the chest~
There's some absolutely wonderful use of alliteration here, and great phrases to instill a life lesson worth learning. A great transfer from a simple source of inspiration, noticed in a moment of happenstance
You picked up I wrote it as a chant, a song. Thank you so much for reading! I’m so excited you noticed! I’ve been working on my tonal parallelism as well so the poetry even when spoken resembles a lyrical rhythm.
There isn’t a way to fix the mind, heart, or soul that can be find in a few seconds of sound bite click bait. Fake fad posters and decapitated Buddhas do not make someone an expert. The true sages knew it took time and effort to become enlightened. I think that reality needs to be spoken about more.
Humans have become so disconnected from themselves and everyone around them. They want instant gratification instead of digging into the dirt and doing the grueling work of growing.
I try, I fail. I try, I fail. I try, I fail. I try, I sometimes succeed.
That is the best way. Thank you for reading and commenting! I appreciate you!
Lovely Poem!!
Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I appreciate you very much.
This reads like the grown-up version of someone quietly sliding a cheat code across the table. No shortcuts, just the real stuff—the kind that actually holds up when life starts shaking the floorboards. ‘Win or learn’… I like how that feels in the chest~
Thank you that is a wonderful compliment. I appreciate you reading and your thoughtful comment.
You’re welcome, Dorie~
There's some absolutely wonderful use of alliteration here, and great phrases to instill a life lesson worth learning. A great transfer from a simple source of inspiration, noticed in a moment of happenstance
You picked up I wrote it as a chant, a song. Thank you so much for reading! I’m so excited you noticed! I’ve been working on my tonal parallelism as well so the poetry even when spoken resembles a lyrical rhythm.
You're very welcome, Doris, I appreciated this, and look forward to more
By the way, I know your name isn't Doris. But autocorrect does
It happens no worries 🩷
Wonderful! It says a lot in a short space.
Thank you so much for reading! I appreciate you very much!
You’re so welcome!
There isn’t a way to fix the mind, heart, or soul that can be find in a few seconds of sound bite click bait. Fake fad posters and decapitated Buddhas do not make someone an expert. The true sages knew it took time and effort to become enlightened. I think that reality needs to be spoken about more.
Humans have become so disconnected from themselves and everyone around them. They want instant gratification instead of digging into the dirt and doing the grueling work of growing.
Yes exactly. It’s work. Hard, exhausting work. The hardest is maintaining grace for yourself while doing it.
That IS the hardest.