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Reisson Poh's avatar

I understand chinese enough to appreciate it, but am nowhere near competent enough to write in chinese. Beautifully written though. Both languages of course.

Andrea Thorfinson's avatar

I never get tired of reading your poetry. Beautiful as always. 🩷

PancakeSushi's avatar

Shows a fragility in its form, in the life it describes, in the frailty of love and tenderness. An introspective piece. Bravo

Gary L Taylor's avatar

That read really beautifully. It moved along really nicely in tune with what you were saying and that pacing and style almost reinforces the words as you read them.

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

Thank you Gary! I appreciate that! This was a good starting point for me, practicing the ancient rules. You know most of ancient Chinese poetry was hymns, their poetry was sung. 🩷

AsukaHotaru's avatar

Ooh Dorie, this one feels like you walked straight into a quiet garden and came back holding the whole mood in your palms.

The Chinese-style couplets make it extra elegant — like each line is bowing to the next one.

Soft, structured, but still hitting that little ache right under the ribs.

Honestly love how you blended classical discipline with that wistful, romantic drift.

It reads like a flower breathing… and then sighing a little~

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

Yes! Exactly! “ flower breathing” part of my cultivation project for myself has been walking and collecting flowers kind of like your character Yūki. I pay special attention to their movement, angle, color, surrounds and then I try to write what they say, what they feel. I started with flowers but I recently added trees more too. I have a poem releasing soon called Sentinel, I think this tree will talk to you too. It has more than a captured sound. I felt like this tree had a soul.