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Scry's avatar

I saw it land

wet and coming apart at the corners,

still holding its shape

but barely.

I don't know how to give it back.

I don't know if you'd want it back,

ruined like this,

or if you're already gone,

building something new

with steadier hands.

All I know is

I'm standing here with someone else's sorrow

and it feels too heavy

for something made of paper.

The wind keeps blowing.

I keep thinking about that child,

how she must have watched it go,

reaching after nothing.

I do that too sometimes

reach for things already lost,

pretend my fingers might close

around air and memory

and call it enough.

Maybe we're all just

letting go of our careful work,

watching it scatter,

wondering if anyone will find the pieces

and understand

what we were trying to make.

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

Stunning. Thank you for this beautiful poem.

Andrea Thorfinson's avatar

Fragile peace, folded with care. There’s so much tenderness and lived history in these few lines. And I agree with Asuka, that last line...

AsukaHotaru's avatar

oh this felt like holding a tiny paper thing and not breathing too hard~

the folding part made my heart go soft

and that last line landed like a hush~

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

🩷 the delicate and the balance tentative at best. Yes don’t breathe too hard, don’t crush it in your hands.

Saif's avatar

The end of the poem turns so quickly. And the rhythm is so playful. Almost like a child’s rhyme.

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

Like ring around the rosie yes? It felt that way writing it, playful yet about something devastating.

Leo thee Lemon's avatar

Beautifully written Dorie

Phoeby's avatar

It’s a beautiful poem through its fragility. I really enjoy it.