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Aiden Marquis's avatar

Nice first chapter. It's like a romance in medias res, of sorts. The MC is there and then, boom, we are introduced to his heart's desire off the jump. Stakes are set nicely.

I think the dialogue and their first meeting was realistic and immersive.

Nicely done.

Andrea Thorfinson's avatar

This pulled me right in. Lovely work, Dorie.

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