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Aiden Marquis's avatar

Nice first chapter. It's like a romance in medias res, of sorts. The MC is there and then, boom, we are introduced to his heart's desire off the jump. Stakes are set nicely.

I think the dialogue and their first meeting was realistic and immersive.

Nicely done.

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Thank you for your comment. I appreciate your feedback very much.

Andrea Thorfinson's avatar

This pulled me right in. Lovely work, Dorie.

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

Thank you so much! I appreciate you reading!

The Secret Ingredient's avatar

So beautiful ~looking forward to following this smart romance.

Bob's avatar

“What would her voice sound like—melodic or soft? What was the scent that would surely cling to her, of jasmine or rain? And her hand… what would it feel like, nestled in his?”

I know far too well, exactly how Ming feels.

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

This is beautiful Bob, thank you for reading🩷

Fiona Bridges's avatar

I'm intrigued!!!!

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

I love a good sappy romance with imperfect characters🩷 thank you for reading

IanDMTaniels&HouseOfChapters's avatar

Kiss already!!!!

Brenda - A Voice that Wonders's avatar

I was truly taken in immediately. Your descriptive words are amazing. Yes I could see why he was drawn to her… 💞

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

Thank you so very much! I appreciate your feedback! 🩷

AsukaHotaru's avatar

Oh this is deliciously fluffy in the BEST academic-romance way, Dorie~ Zhao Ming basically went from ‘history professor’ to ‘history is irrelevant, she is my life’s purpose now’ in three seconds flat. I love how you wrote him short-circuiting over her voice, her scent, her department… honestly he’s one missed heartbeat away from reorganizing the entire library just so she has to talk to him again.

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

He will do something similar in chapter six and seven

AsukaHotaru's avatar

Oh I knew it — Zhao Ming is absolutely the type to lose all critical thinking the moment she appears. I’m fully prepared for him to reorganize half the campus in chapters six and seven just to impress her again.

Dorie Snow/雪多丽's avatar

It’s my escape from academia so it has to be fluffy and light and full of hope. 🩷

AsukaHotaru's avatar

It’s indeed fluffy with light and hope swirled in it~!